Paragraph Editing to Create a Professional Organization of Ideas

PARAGRAPH ORGANIZATION

           YOUR TASK:

The following poorly organized paragraphs follow the indirect plan.

Decide what the main idea is in each paragraph. This is the guiding sentences. All further sentences must relate to this guiding idea.

Then revise each paragraph so that it is organized directly with a focus on improving coherence and clarity.

PARAGRAPH ONE: Do not re-write it or edit it in any way. Simply change the organization so that it is in the direct organizational pattern. This is professional business writing. We use this format for 70 percent of our Business Messages.

1. Logos, business stationary, business cards, Web sites, and PowerPoint presentations would benefit from a polished professional image. Small businesses should consider investing in a graphic designer for important visual communications. Professional graphic designers can be helpful to both large and small businesses. Large corporations have the resources to hire graphic designers to help with key projects. These projects might include corporate and annual reports.

PARAGRAPH TWO: Do not re-write it or edit it in any way. Simply change the organization so that it is in the direct organizational pattern. This is professional business writing. We use this format for 70 percent of our Business Messages.

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Paragraph Editing to Create a Professional Organization of Ideas Answer

1. Professional graphic designers can be helpful to both large and small businesses. Large corporations have the resources to hire graphic designers to help with key projects. These projects might include corporate and annual reports.Small businesses should consider investing in a graphic designer for important visual communications. Logos, business stationary, business cards, Web sites, and PowerPoint presentations would benefit from a polished professional image.